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Your bass is the spindle that weaves your song,
and I'm still, paralyzed.
Each note played is a reminder of the wrong
I'm caught in your web, hypnotized.
Your raw alien beauty bites me,
and the gash  in my heart wont heal,
the truth cascades off your body in waves
and I cannot pretend this isn't real.

You give me a hundred slashes,
cause' my regret and guilt cannot pay my debt,
My heart beats its rebellion,
against the yearning desire for death.

The music's icy hands,
claw down everything in its path,
and I'm standing amoungst the ruins,
denied protection in that empty hearth.
There'd once burnt flames of passion,
and where our love had thrived,
but your hate and ice freeze the fire,
Leaving me in the cold to die.

You led me to our empty moshpit,
and then your played out your final answer,
each strike of your guitar stripped away my immunity
spreading this emotional cancer.
Trapped under the dark tree,
that slowly dominated me
Seeing no light through the branches,
and knowing I couldn't be set free.

The music's icy hands,
claw down everything in its path,
and I'm standing amongst the ruins,
denied protection in that empty hearth.
There'd once burnt flames of passion,
and where our love had thrived,
but your hate and ice freeze the fire,
Leaving me in the cold to die.


You give me a hundred slashes,
but the regret and guilt cannot pay my debt,
My heart beats its rebellion,
against the yearning desire for death


Cold...
So cold...

Your bass is the spindle that weaves your song,
and I'm still, paralyzed.
The hurt of rejection...
burns through my emotions of conceal
and in the song's midst I struggle...
but no matter how hard I fight...
I cannot pretend this isn't real.
This one's my best.
The last verse is thrown all together randomly, expains it.
This was meant to be a poem....but it looked better as a song.
Comments appreciated.
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Cas5599 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautifully written. : )
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009   Writer
!!!!
thats why its featured. haha.
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009
Wow....This is so very gorgeous, and from using only words that tell a lovely written story.you are quite one talented lady. =]
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009   Writer
lol.
You saw and cmntd this before. ^^ ahaha.
butbut ty.
pity I cannot sing. ><
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009
mah bad... ah well.. i really love it XD
Hmmmm..
Em xx ♥
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occasion-bitch Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
OMG LUVS IT!!!!
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009   Writer
haha thanks for the fave.
I love it too.
thats why i featured it. ^^
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Interface Designer
im playin this wiki man style,
because i was born as a disciplined child

wha no no no no, well yea ah e yea, wha nao nao nao nana nao, yea ey e yea
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Writer
WTF are you on about!!!!????
Stop losing my mind!!!
LOL.
I'm really not following you. what are you insinuating???
xDDD
xP
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Interface Designer
haha,
I TOLD YOU!
its a song,
those are the lyrics

go listen to the song


IF THIS WORLD WERE MINE by Slightly Stoopid

and you'll understand,
i mean no harm
:[
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