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Your bass is the spindle that weaves your song,
and I'm still, paralyzed.
Each note played is a reminder of the wrong
I'm caught in your web, hypnotized.
Your raw alien beauty bites me,
and the gash  in my heart wont heal,
the truth cascades off your body in waves
and I cannot pretend this isn't real.

You give me a hundred slashes,
cause' my regret and guilt cannot pay my debt,
My heart beats its rebellion,
against the yearning desire for death.

The music's icy hands,
claw down everything in its path,
and I'm standing amoungst the ruins,
denied protection in that empty hearth.
There'd once burnt flames of passion,
and where our love had thrived,
but your hate and ice freeze the fire,
Leaving me in the cold to die.

You led me to our empty moshpit,
and then your played out your final answer,
each strike of your guitar stripped away my immunity
spreading this emotional cancer.
Trapped under the dark tree,
that slowly dominated me
Seeing no light through the branches,
and knowing I couldn't be set free.

The music's icy hands,
claw down everything in its path,
and I'm standing amongst the ruins,
denied protection in that empty hearth.
There'd once burnt flames of passion,
and where our love had thrived,
but your hate and ice freeze the fire,
Leaving me in the cold to die.


You give me a hundred slashes,
but the regret and guilt cannot pay my debt,
My heart beats its rebellion,
against the yearning desire for death


Cold...
So cold...

Your bass is the spindle that weaves your song,
and I'm still, paralyzed.
The hurt of rejection...
burns through my emotions of conceal
and in the song's midst I struggle...
but no matter how hard I fight...
I cannot pretend this isn't real.
This one's my best.
The last verse is thrown all together randomly, expains it.
This was meant to be a poem....but it looked better as a song.
Comments appreciated.
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Cas5599 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautifully written. : )
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2009   Writer
!!!!
thats why its featured. haha.
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009
Wow....This is so very gorgeous, and from using only words that tell a lovely written story.you are quite one talented lady. =]
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2009   Writer
lol.
You saw and cmntd this before. ^^ ahaha.
butbut ty.
pity I cannot sing. ><
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009
mah bad... ah well.. i really love it XD
Hmmmm..
Em xx ♥
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occasion-bitch Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
OMG LUVS IT!!!!
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009   Writer
haha thanks for the fave.
I love it too.
thats why i featured it. ^^
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Interface Designer
im playin this wiki man style,
because i was born as a disciplined child

wha no no no no, well yea ah e yea, wha nao nao nao nana nao, yea ey e yea
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Writer
WTF are you on about!!!!????
Stop losing my mind!!!
LOL.
I'm really not following you. what are you insinuating???
xDDD
xP
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Interface Designer
haha,
I TOLD YOU!
its a song,
those are the lyrics

go listen to the song


IF THIS WORLD WERE MINE by Slightly Stoopid

and you'll understand,
i mean no harm
:[
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2009   Writer
I looked up the lyrics.
Cool band name.
But I still don't get it....apart from that its based on the bass as well.
I'm really thick-headed.
My comps stuffed up so I cannot listen to anything.
LOL.
that probs explains it. :(

I'm a paranoid one...><
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009   Interface Designer
clean your computer up :P
run some virus scans and what not

its basically,
just a cool bass line
and the point of it was
if the world was mine
(like having it the way you wanted)
:]
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2009   Writer
why are you tellingg mee about the world being the way I wanted???
and I thought I strayed off topic fast lol.
haha.
The shit on my desktop is overloaded....but I ain't allowed to touch anything...its my parents crap.
Um yeah, it sucks being 14.
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009   Interface Designer
i remember when i turned 15 :)
i started havin a lot of fun
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2009   Writer
shuddup. :(
Now I'm jealousss.

What's this 'wiki' tradition about anyway?
sounds alot like Maori (NZealand)
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Interface Designer
listen to a song
by slightly stoopid called
if this world were mine

:]
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009   Writer
huhhh?
never heard.
let me in on the details???
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wikiwiseman Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2009   Interface Designer
i play the wiki bass line
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009   Writer
o0.
i know nothing of that...><

explain it?

.xc
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milou7 Featured By Owner May 22, 2009  Hobbyist Interface Designer
i like this one XD
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 23, 2009   Writer
thanks for the fave, babe.
LOOLS.
read um...he poisoned the angel...and apologizing to nothingness.
theyre my 2 besties.
ahaha.

.xc
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shenhai Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
*chibi shiny eyes* I love it!!!!!
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 17, 2009   Writer
thannnkssiies for the favey.
heh.
i thought it was a tad too long.><

.xc
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shenhai Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
But it was a really cool a tad too long. XDDD ^.^
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 18, 2009   Writer
sounded like freaking yellowcard's 'breathing'
yellow card.
they have sad lives....

or they used to work as urine samplers...
xDDD.

.xc
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shenhai Featured By Owner May 19, 2009
XDD haven't heard much yellowcard. But what I have heard was pretty good.
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 22, 2009   Writer
i got sick of them after a while.
i mean, i love their guitar thing and all, but all their songs seem like they cannot keep a girl or they either have a problem with keeping girls close and not 34290483 miles away or theyre either nearly dying and whining about their relationship or someting.

-is a cold bitch- haha

.xc
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shenhai Featured By Owner May 25, 2009
XDDD well, albeit the lyrics can be lacking at times, but their musical talent is mostly what draws me to them. I just love how layered their music is. :D
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 28, 2009   Writer
hehe.
im into nightwish and evanescence right now. followed by a touch of billy talent, a strong dose of breaking benjamin and a hint of tsunami bomb plus some papa roach.
xDDD.
my playlist aint all abt genres.

.xc
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2009
Wow!! I love this. Its beautiful. Captures the bass lovely!! XD
Great Job!
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2009   Writer
Aww thanksss.
These compliments just make me melt inside.
So do faves. (hint hint much?)
-is selfish but cannot help it.-
BTW I like your ID. preety prettty.

.xc
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner May 8, 2009
Aww.. i hope you like them.. At the moment im just going through all my messages, comments, favs, and deviations.. *this will take a while* ima gonna check out ur stuff hopefully soon!!
since your into hints..umm.. i like people watching me? *hint* *hint*
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 9, 2009   Writer
LOOL.
i think i got the hint.
^^

you like billy talentt?
'Devil in a midnight mass'' is my fave. ^^

.xc
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner May 9, 2009
Lol yeah i think you did.
Thankyou heaps.
I love Billy Talent!! XD
I have that song, but havn't really listened to it.. I shall listen to it now and come back and tell you what i think of it..
What other bands do you like??
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 10, 2009   Writer
nightwish is the one that holds most of my faves.
but breaking benjamin holds my current fave.
diary of jane...including the vid clip.
and maybe um...lily allen.
cuz the contrast between the holy voice and the unholy shit her songs are aboutt.
woowwwwwwies.


and chyuu?
.xc
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x-Emz-Heart-x Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
Niiice.. dont listen to any of them but a lil bit of lilly allen.. love her voice..
Umm.. me..
Billy talent [def' atm] umm.. Placebo, Atreyu. [all the heavy metal bands ie. slipknot, disturbed, korn, system of a down] umm.. that song by 30h!3..
and a few random ones from just here and there.
Em xx ♥
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RisaRaile Featured By Owner May 12, 2009   Writer
Dont trust me?
i like that 3oh3 song too.um..
diary of jane by breaking benjamin is like my current fave.
but its the only song i like.
BT?
um..i used to be like wowwwwwwww but now ive gotten kinda sick.
are they still alive?
betcha theyre old lol.
they sound like a grunge 70s band.
cool thoo. xD

.xc
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